United States • 23 y/o • FemaleReviews Received
Oh dear. I do wish you had taken the time to CHECK THIS THROUGH before submitting it. It's littered with grammar and spelling errors, which totally undermines it. There is the germ of a half-decent story idea here, but your clumsiness and - sorry to say - laziness has ruined it.
A nice, heartfelt poem somewhat spoilt by your failure to CHECK your spelling!
Take the time to use your computer's spell-check facility before submitting future work...