United States • 22 y/o • MaleReviews Received
Nothing seems too rushed. It works nicely. I can't wait for the next part. Soooo many questions! I'm sure all will be answered in good time. Keep writing!
Part of the thing with the name is the style your going for. Lu sounds (to me) like a name of a fantasy type world. Names like the ones melissak suggested fit the world, and the ones I would say most fits your style are Keon or Yusuf, although the others are fine as well. The names sound a bit too rich for a poor boy, especially if he's an orphan. I looked up some names (although I feel like that's never very satisfying), and I found a few that were okay.
Ern
Pepin
William
Liam
Most of the others were kinda weird. Hope this helps!
I think I agree with melissak (again :3). I don't really know what it is though. Something to consider about the dresses is that they might have tried to give her less fancy dresses to help her ease into her new life. Less frills, less poofyness, less lace, but still soft and silky. Also, about how old is Lu?
Well, Henna is weird, and Sir Ayren seems kinda fishy, but I'm sure there's more on that later.
Another nice part to another nice series, can't wait for the next bit!
Another great part to a series! Adds more description about Ren, and sets him up for greater stuff later! (Personal predictions. My friends hate movie nights with me) Still so many questions unanswered, but I'm sure they will be answered due time. Keep writing! We will keep reading!
Alright. You and your "four review" Thing. I don't care if I have to force three of my friends online or not to review I WILL read the next section! WIth the predictions. I see a bit more... humanity from the characters in this section, but also that crippling darkness eminating from Mistress Silver. Lef and Turin... Not sure what to feel about them. I liked this segment. We learn more, and she is starting to get suspicious of the place. Anyways, Keep writing! We will keep reading!
Amazing