Delusions Reviews
3 reviews have given an average rating of 3.7 out of 5 Stars
I suggest you try to explore the character more deeply. Sometimes among all the chaos, you might produce a spectacular story line.
Kat Thanks! Since this is probably the first entry, I will definitly explore how this character acts. Thank you very much for the feedback.
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Nesh (: And do write more (:
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Kat I will try! Having difficulty paying attention to so many different things (school, writing, reading, everything)
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Yessssssss make more!!!!!!!!!
Don't listen to Apemann
Kat Thank you so very much! I plan on continuing when my mind has set itself and my plans finally get set in stone. Crazy life!!
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Well, haven't we been here before?
There is no STRUCTURE to you story; no PLOT, no characterisation to speak of, no sense of purpose or meaning. It reads like a draft excerpt of something else you might have been working on. What is ISN'T is a proper story, far from it. Even the title makes no sense as it appears to have no relevance to the 'story'.
I will concede that you do at least appear to have taken a little more care with your spelling. I didn't notice as many errors as in previous works, so well done for that.