Don't Let Me Go Reviews
This is so good! Write more!!!! Love when you said"A dream is a wish made by the heart.' I got so touched. I'm one of those people who love quotes and this is my new favorite!
I really nice idea for a story. As others have commented, take more care with your spelling and grammar: "I seen his smile forming..." for instance. USE your computer's spell-check and thesaurus facilities. that's what they are there for.
Nice work overall, though. Well done :-)
There were a few grammar mistakes, like "seen" instead of "see," and you forgot to end the part where the narrator speaks with the ", but besides that is was beautiful and amazing. I hope you write more
I love this beautiful short story because there's not many like it. Overall, good job, but it had a few mistakes such as:
'Just than, I woke up.'
Instead it should've been;
"Just then, I woke up."
Just be sure to check it through before submitting, but nice job!