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Fingers and Machines Reviews

2 reviews have given an average rating of 5 out of 5 Stars
LeCat127
LeCat127 gave a rating of 5

This isn't necessarily my usual taste in genres, but I really like your writing style! Holding off on the reveal of the finger was a good call; I liked the surprise of realizing what the character is holding onto. I'm not sure I entirely understand this story, haha, but I enjoyed it!

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SamizdatMcTasty
SamizdatMcTasty Thank you! It's meant to leave the question open to you own interpretation of who the finger belongs to. Glad you enjoyed it! I'll be taking a look at your stories soon.
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-Lynnyan-
Lyn gave a rating of 5

I think it would be a bit more interesting if you held off the reveal of having a finger in the pocket of the main character. Perhaps use the improper noun “it” instead of “a finger”. Just something to think about. Also, good job with the repetition of the winning and losing, that added texture to the story. Well done!

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SamizdatMcTasty
SamizdatMcTasty Thank you for your comments! That's a great recommendation. Holding off the reveal a bit is probably the right call.
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Lyn
Lyn You’re very welcome :)
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