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2 reviews have given an average rating of 4.5 out of 5 Stars
burbrkac000
burbrkac000 gave a rating of 5

Beautiful poem!
Credits on the metamorphic touches. Provide more clarity and reading flow?
I love the meaning, it makes the reader feel the emotion and thoughts

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AaronTheRocker
AaronTheRocker gave a rating of 4

The comparisons of the abstract idea is amazing.
'Sharp tines scratching the black board', 'bug in a spider's web'- those are great connections .
You had me making all these connections and seeing what is happening, but then the ending came and it sort of threw me off the rails.
I believe if you took out, "She was gone" and then had "Never to return again" be the last phrase by itself for the ending, it would spark that emotion of one unique kind of love has vanished.
Overall, it was great.

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M D Smith IV
M D Smith IV Thanks for the suggestion. I do think your last line works better.
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