My teacher had us read this and write our own Hansel and Grettle fanfiction, and I LOVE THIS-

I love it! The idea that the witch was allergic to gluten and sugar-free was funny! I agree that the ending was a little abrupt, but I understand how since it's a school project it has to be short. The unedited version of Malhuqu Presidium was a very abrupt ending for me too because it was a school project and I was already pushing the limits!

I wish I read this sooner!

I like the way you told it in the First-person, even if the end was a little too abrupt.

While the execution was really good, the premis is just genius. The ending almost felt too down to earth after the story we were just told, though