This is really beautiful. I can't really tell if you were meaning to write about yourself, or about someone else, or both, but I think that either way this is a very powerful work. It really painted a picture for me, and I think others would agree.

This is really good and really powerful. The ability to reflect on yourself and your past is actually really hard to do. I especially like this sentence: "I saw you, bit by bit, the defeat slumping your shoulders, tainting your soul." The distance you've identified between you and your experiences and the old you all in one swirl mixed with your self-awareness is incredible. Super interesting stuff and written in an impactful way.