SCHOOL'S BATHROOM MIRRORS Reviews
I like where the story is going, But it's not there yet. keep working on it :)
Good job
I think that though you do need to work on the grammar and punctuation and sentencing, there is a great idea implanted in your writing. I suggest making this the prompt for a new story.
You could start out with the boy not thinking that the story was true, and entering the abandoned bathroom. This way the reader is still creeped out and worried for the main character.
You could also use an age for the boy (both of them), and tell why the boy in the mirror is first off in the mirror and second whh he skipped his classes.
Great work, can't wait to hear more!
You don't have a story here yet, Matthew. It's mainly a collection of scattered ideas, loosely strung together with poor grammar. I'd recommend you took a more sensible approach to your writing if you want to find an audience for it.
Thank you for your story. There is the basis here for a good story, but your rushed approach to your writing and the lack of attention to basic detail (punctuation, spelling, grammar) spoil your work. More care and attention will help you write a better story and also present it in a more acceptable and pleasing manner. The use of capitals is horrible.
Please write more!!!!!!!