That Safe Haven Reviews
I think it was great! There were a few punctuation places missed, but I don't think it degraded much. The story was beautiful, and reminded me of the move "Up."
It was my favorite growing up. Anywho, thanks! Hope to hear more from you!
This love story is literally better than twilight! All though I would have liked to know more about her back story and maybe more details. But this is so cute!!!
Oh dear, this could have been SO much better.
What you have presented is a 500-word outline of a much longer story. You have tried to cram a long story into a short one and, unfortunately, it just hasn't worked. There is no plot to speak of, no characterisation and no action of any description. It reads like an idea for a story that you've rushed to jot down before you forgot it. It certainly does not read like something you have put a great deal of thought or effort into...
You say that this is something of a departure from what you'd normally write. I would be most interested in reading your 'normal' output :-)