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That Safe Haven Reviews

3 reviews have given an average rating of 4 out of 5 Stars
Kaleighishappy
Kat gave a rating of 5

I think it was great! There were a few punctuation places missed, but I don't think it degraded much. The story was beautiful, and reminded me of the move "Up."
It was my favorite growing up. Anywho, thanks! Hope to hear more from you!

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JamesD147
JamesD147 Thank you, I try my best to avoid error but sometimes some just slip by. Thanks again
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Kat
Kat No problem.
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aspen-faye
Aspen-Faye gave a rating of 5

This love story is literally better than twilight! All though I would have liked to know more about her back story and maybe more details. But this is so cute!!!

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JamesD147
JamesD147 Thank you so much, as previously said, I like to keep it basic, however I am looking into expanding this one day so I'll be sure to leave less to the imagination. Thanks again, it means a lot
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apemann
Andy (Formerly Apemann) gave a rating of 2

Oh dear, this could have been SO much better.

What you have presented is a 500-word outline of a much longer story. You have tried to cram a long story into a short one and, unfortunately, it just hasn't worked. There is no plot to speak of, no characterisation and no action of any description. It reads like an idea for a story that you've rushed to jot down before you forgot it. It certainly does not read like something you have put a great deal of thought or effort into...

You say that this is something of a departure from what you'd normally write. I would be most interested in reading your 'normal' output :-)

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JamesD147
JamesD147 Okay thanks, I don't normally plan (I know I should), but often I feel like I just want to write. Something gives me the idea and I just go with what comes to mind, however I may try expand this, plan ahead, give more character an actual 'character'. However, I like the feel of 'basic' stories and that the emptiness leaves more to the mind to create your own interpretation of everything
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Andy (Formerly Apemann)
Andy (Formerly Apemann) There is something to what you say, I agree. Even so, the bottom line is that there HAS to be some sort of plot to follow otherwise the exercise in futile, both as writer and reader. You have some good ideas; have more faith in yourself and take the time to make what you write work.
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JamesD147
JamesD147 Okay thank you, means a lot.
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