The Artist Reviews
What a pity you spoiled an otherwise engaging story with this out-of-place line:
"Vaishnav! You good for nothing twat! I'm trying to teach an important derivation here!"
Surely your vocabulary could have come up with something less jarring and offensive than the word 'twat'? It's not the word I object to, more its use in this piece. You write so well - almost poetically at times - yet throw in this crudity without rhyme or reason. It does nothing for the story and certainly does not reflect well on you as a writer.
Regrettably it is this I will remember most about your story rather than the more important (and interesting) point you were trying to make.