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The Good Samaritan Reviews

5 reviews have given an average rating of 4.6 out of 5 Stars
aspen-faye
Aspen-Faye gave a rating of 5

This is such a great lesson and story! I love it and you must make more!!!! There's nothing wrong with this story so don't listen to Apemann!! Your a amazing writer and please keep on writing stories!

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pogon1966
pogon1966 gave a rating of 5

Well written story. This writer has a great potential.

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TurnThePaige
TurnThePaige gave a rating of 5

This story is really intense and pulls you in quick! It almost makes you feel like you were there with the way it is so well worded

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CPierko
CPierko gave a rating of 5

An intense story that leaves the writer mouth watering for more and more details. A quick read full a juicy details and eye opening surprises. Another 10 out of 10 story. Or should I rate it a 12 out of 10?

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apemann
Andy (Formerly Apemann) gave a rating of 3

There is the basis here for a good story. Unfortunately you have not really told it very well. The scenes are clich├ęd and the dialogue stilted. There is little natural 'flow' to the story. You move from one idea or scenario with little in the way of explanation, which gives the story a somewhat 'clunky' feel.

You have also failed to follow the submission guidelines; the use of numerals in prose is very bad practice, yet there are numerous examples in your story. Number references should always be written in full: twelve years old, three-thirty, nine-one-one, for example.

Take time to check your spelling: "she manages not to hit another care..." would not be picked-up by your spell checker.

There is much to recommend in your story; at the same time it has many flaws. You write well but need to practice your art more - and to read more to get a better feel of how a story flows.

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