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Alright, alright, I got into it. I like the concept.
For the intro, the repetition is nice, but it's too much repetition in my opinion. Perhaps if it had a break in it like,
"The ghost in my room talks to me
The ghost no one believes
The ghost in my room that helped me clean
The ghost that went away..."
Feel me on that?
Also I see a lot of filler words that elongates the progression of this work.
Killer ending though. Just reading the last line by itself is great.
I can't help but see emotions get in the way of reality or at least a logical balanced perception of reality.
Ukraine/Russian war we knew was gonna start. Just the matter of when it blew up. It started just after the "ending" of the Cold War. Putin made it clear to NATO that he doesn't want Ukraine to be part of NATO. Of course, NATO put it's nose where it doesn't belong by asking Ukraine if they want to join NATO and placed troops at the Russia-Ukraine border just like Russia did. And it doesn't help ease the situation when Western countries show weak leadership and lack of knowledge by instigating flames of war while funding Russia from oil shipments and sending military aid to Ukraine (basically adding more fuel to the fire) along with U.S political leaders doing some shady deals (some considered treasonous) with Ukraine.
Basically, if America along with NATO just stayed away from Ukraine, more than likely, this situation wouldn't have happened.
For the bills being passed in the U.S states on transgender issues. First, it's the states' rights to invoke laws that don't violate federal laws.
Next, the Florida bill isn't anti-gay/LGBT. It's a bill that simply doesn't want public schools (from pre-K through 3rd grade) to engage in LGBT ideology that would more than likely be an indoctrination method instead of fact-based education. It's not getting rid of the community or banishing it as a whole. The bill is getting rid of the biased nonfactual information that honestly shouldn't be taught at such a young age.
Also, the Texas bill is actually for the interest of children. Most who do the sex change is after they hit puberty, which in result has them already being a stature difference in size, muscle mass and overall competitiveness due to how the brain functions differently between males and females. It's hard to change your height, muscle mass and overall way of thinking unless it is done in great measures which then becomes a biological/health danger to the individual because it's gonna change how they grow or develop naturally as it wasn't meant to be such.
Finally, there is really no change in suicide risk whether a therapy/operation is done or not, let alone mental health conditions coming-up.
Here are two sources in relation to the Texas bill situation:
https://www.heritage.org/gender/commentary/sex-reassignment-doesnt-work-here-the-evidence
https://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pmc/articles/PMC4771004/
Saying police target people for the color of their skin is a vague broad statement. Although it does happen, it is at an extremely low-ratio when comparing those who do to the whole police force, and those who have been caught and reported for such have been put to justice. Also, there has to be intent put forth in such because over three-quarters of these "race deaths" actually deals with someone who is considered dangerous AND have/has done a dangerous act(s) whether against other civilians or law enforcement.
Police causing disturbances in "peaceful protests" is an outlandish idea let alone one-sided. Are there moments where law enforcement may go too far? Yeah. But are there moments where a "peaceful" protest turns violent because of protesters? Definitely. It happens to be that the latter happens more often than not.
Interestingly enough to counter your argument that black people live in fear of police, most high-density black communities actually want there to be more police presence because they feel unsafe since police stations/officers are not as prevalent.
To say that it must be stop, we all know. We want it to stop, but nothing is perfect. No matter what reforms or laws get pushed through it's not gonna be perfect.
In all, the vast majority of people do see other people as just people- same as their-self. It's a shame that there are bad people, but it's nature and it is hard to change.
Uhhh.....
What did I just read?
I'm so lost with words.
But I will say, it definitely is different and there does seem to be a concentrated idea.
So you got that goin' at least.
Sadly, but naturally, it's the innocence of time.
Ah, the ocean.
For someone who has thalassophobia, such as myself, this would be a nightmare situation. And this correlates well with someone who may fall off the beaten trail mentally. Get a little too curious, anxious or overwhelmed, then all of a sudden it goes down hill.
Oh dang!...
That's a hell of an ending.
Reminds me of the movie Mother! with Jennifer Lawrence and Javier Bardem. But the movie is very much symbolism whereas your story is direct with a little extra 'filler' moments to add spice and wholeness to it.
Not too shabby of a writing.
"Expect the worst, hope for the best."
"Prepare for war, but hold your gun at ease."
"Just because you don't see the enemy that doesn't mean they don't see you."
That's what this poetry reminds me of. It also reminds me of 'The Warning'. An album from 1984 by Queensryche.
I know I'm not your 'lover', but I gotta say something.
"I don't do drugs, but I'm addicted to you." reminds me of the song "Addicted" by Le Mans. Total 80s Hard Rock. Except their song is more... sexualized.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=YhaLh1CGFPw