United States • 21 y/o • MaleReviews Given
I really enjoyed this!
Simple and to-the-point while still having a double-twist in it.
I agree with the premises of the idea of 'stop having women be sexualized objects', fully agree on that. They are people. Living beings that have emotions, thoughts, reasons and a life of their own just like everyone else.
Though there are two concepts that I understand what you are getting at, yet I feel they are misrepresented or misunderstood (unless I'm reading it wrong), but the idea of women's sports getting paid less, usually that is based on ratings and skill-set as seen most dominantly between the NBA and WNBA.
For the 'patriarchy' idea. Well, I mean, was it really the 'patriarchy' that made or contributed to the way it is? Personally, I don't think so. I believe cultural values that have passed overtime has resulted in such things to happen like such cause and effect relations. Once abortion was legalized along with the idea of divorce being 'okay', rates of rape and sexual assault, unprotected sex and of course, abortion rose to higher levels than they were before such things were acceptable.
Patriarchy isn't just about men, but how society is worked as a whole with everyone. Same with Matriarchy and all other forms. There can never be true dominance until one group crumbles to the ground and it can't be true dominance if there are separate roles as to which each side possesses that can't be put on the same scale.
Patriarchy isn't the same as cultural values (in terms of separating the two concepts because most people seem to jumble them into the same idea). Patriarchy is based on set of mostly (keyword: mostly) characterful beliefs that are actually expected of all sides to co-exist in peace and well being for all by teaching from The Bible whereas cultural values is the idea what is deemed 'acceptable' and what 'isn't' from society itself.
Can the two overlap? Of course. How do we value which side is in the wrong or right? Who really knows?
Sorry I wrote an essay, but I just wanted to put my two cents in on this topic because I find this pretty intriguing and have been in discussions about this before with many people.
I appreciate it when boldness like this comes to terms with reality. Gives a moment for us to actually think and reflect on what we do and why.
This is beautiful. To look at times of the past and reflect on them whether good or bad, it is a good way to learn and grow along with connecting with family.
I especially love the last line. It definitely fits in with the idea that it isn't where or when something happens, it's who it's with that matter's most. Reminds me of a little quote by someone whom I forgot the name of, but,
"Live for the nights you can't remember with the friends you'll never forget."
This is an interesting concept to a story. It gives me some strange Harry Potter vibes for some reason (maybe because of the my thought-relation with this and the mermaids). This also taps into my fear of deep dark water so...yeah, spooky.
There were some parts to this story where the grammar got to me so I had to re-read a few parts (that may just be me though) and I need more info on these characters and the backstory on this.
Hope you write more for this story because if this is it, I may just cry because this is something vastly different not just the plot, but structure wise also with the intro and the sizes of paragraphs being consistent with phenomenal breaks.
Nice!
Agree with the idea that we should be protecting the environment, but there are some obvious aspects in this writing/song that make it 'misleading' (if that's an appropriate term to use).
First, looking at the wrong problem. California wildfires are bad and detrimental to those who live there, but they are natural and at the rate it is going it is actually helping nature. Geography and climate-temperament plays a role because it is just a drier place that is able to grow vegetation that will later on most likely burn because of the lack of water/dry season. Most of California forests are overgrown and no life is able to live because of high canopies which block out sunlight to the floor, diseased and dying plants leaving behind dry/dead material that doesn't decompose because of the shedding of water that mostly only hits the canopies and lack of diversity in the eco-system. With the wildfires they are having now, it actually will help the forest and the people living there in the long run because with new growth there is less chance of wildfires and there will be larger attainment of water because the plants growing hold it in.
The real problem to be looking at is illegal cutting and poor farming practices. This problem is relevant in the Amazon. Large amount of forests are being cleared, both legally and illegally for farming which goes nowhere because of irrigation systems that don't work out for them and then they keep clearing the forest out contaminating bodies of water and the soil that results in fires and floods that are extreme and historic usually every couple of years which isn't natural for the area to witness.
Second, twisted-politics. They talk about Trump "turns a blind eye..."Global warming's an expensive little hoax"". For something that tries to make Trump look bad, it actually goes in his favor because when he pulled the US out of the PCA (Paris Climate Agreement) the US did better for reducing emissions than all the other nations in the PCA and the US didn't spend millions upon millions of dollars 'revamping' the economy to be 'eco-friendly' when it turned out that the PCA actually did nothing because no country met their quota for carbon emission rates while the US, which backed out of the deal, went above and beyond reducing rates.
Third, extinction of animals and plants. For there to be evolution, there must be extinction. As for how the world sees extinction today, it seems like a huge deal, but looking back at history, it really isn't that bad. There have been about 6 mass extinctions (including now) throughout the history of earth resulting in about 99.9% percent of all living organisms and there are animals and plants that are adapting right now like fish in the Hudson river which can tolerate chemical-induced waters and elephants now losing tusks as wheat can grow in the cold and produce more grain.
Creatures and plants will adapt to their condition and it is the result of Darwinism and nature.
Although humans and environmental actions do play a role in the change of the climate, nature ultimately has the upper-hand. Nature can and will find a balance. Whether it is at our expense or not, it will find a way.
There are stronger forces out there than humans.
An interesting concept for a story.
It reminds me of a classic horror film where a haunted castle (in this case, a shack) is high on the rocks in the sea mixed with Coraline vibes.
The comparisons of the abstract idea is amazing.
'Sharp tines scratching the black board', 'bug in a spider's web'- those are great connections .
You had me making all these connections and seeing what is happening, but then the ending came and it sort of threw me off the rails.
I believe if you took out, "She was gone" and then had "Never to return again" be the last phrase by itself for the ending, it would spark that emotion of one unique kind of love has vanished.
Overall, it was great.
Oh how true this is.
To take away life that is made in oneself is to not only reject their life, but a part of your's also.