Adalyne5

I love emotive stories like this. Good job - keep up the good work!

I really enjoyed reading this. The very unexpected ending was brilliant!

Try 'Father retires to the living room# rather than 'father resigns to the living room'. Resigning refers to quitting a job due to pressure or a crisis, retire can mean leaving a scene or a room voluntarily.
That said, I like your descriptions of nature and the twist at the end is a good one. Keep it up.

I like it! I like the journey the seed takes down the river, and I sympathised with the seed too!

Very, very good. I was gripped throughout! You could almost leave it as a story in it's own right, and leave it to the imagination about what happened to the boys before and after... just an idea.

I loved it! And I agree with Matt, I don't think you need to add anything else to this.

This is actually really good!!