United States • 24 y/o • FemaleReviews Received
That was.... interesting. It would have been better if it had been a bit longer.... Sadness
It was good... i guess, but it really was too many ideas stuffed into such little space.
Good Job! Keep writing more, maybe an all Harry Potter fanfic next though?
Too big a subject crammed into too few words makes this all rather nonsensical. The idea sounded fun, but you have failed to deliver I'm afraid.
There are also numerous problems with the layout of your story. I suggest that you revisit the Submission Guidelines and take them on board...