United Kingdom • 65 y/o • MaleReviews Received
There are some great aspects of this price of writing, but there is also a feeling of incompletion. Please do write more.
just saying if you are going for the 100 word story thing this is 101 words but still I love the message!
I believe that I am on both, but neither side. Darkness controls me and my thoughts, but Light is the one trying to find me. So I am both the side of Dark and Light. Yet, Light has it's consequences and Dark is a horrible thing, so yet again I don't choose either side.
I hope this makes a little sense...
nicely woven ink number two repetitive wording would need a change takes away from the piece but over all good Haikus
It's actually a rather good point that you bring up, I hadn't even thought about it before reading this.
It was good, I personally really feel the pain even just reading it makes me feel bad.
I would suggest using stronger word choice, but since the people you're writing about are shallow, it makes a good parallel to keep it more simple. Good story about a common issue that isn't spoken of enough.