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Andy (Formerly Apemann)

United Kingdom • 65 y/o • Male

Writer, story-teller, reader, dog-lover and humourist!

Reviews Received

Loved it!
One suggestion - the 'pain' and 'again' rhyme really killed the rhythm of the poem. It made my brain stop to look over the stanza instead of praise the work itself.
Besides that, I believe you are doing great!

14 Jan, 2017 0

triangle reviewed Blackout

intense

6 Jan, 2018 0

From_Me reviewed Getaway

it was good!

11 Jan, 2017 0

Kat reviewed Getaway

Pretty good, but I propose use of the ';' in the beginning. What should've taken it's place was the '-', which would signal that the narrator was adding on a peice of information.
Nice work!

14 Jan, 2017 0

Shortmovieclip reviewed Blackout

Your story has a darkness that stays within you penned it well thanks.

12 Apr, 2017 0

Aspen-Faye reviewed Checklist

Wait wasn't it supposed to be 100 words?

21 Feb, 2017 0

RebelSoul reviewed Conductor

Well that was a twist, que the random employee with a camera.

9 Mar, 2017 0

Auron reviewed Classic Salvation

I enjoy this story because of how smooth the words flow together. Great job!