Andy (Formerly Apemann)

Beautiful, simple and heartfelt. Your mother is lucky to have such a loving daughter :-)

Another fabulous and moving poem from you. I am delighted to recommend this to everyone who visits the site. Wonderful!

Beautiful and elegant - just like the author of this lovely poem. Fabulous, hon! xx

This story is, of course, utterly brilliant! It is, though, a big ask - at over 11000 words - to sit and read in one go. It is worth it, though! :-) Fabulous work xx

Wonderfully evocative! I love the way you build up the tension and feeling of paranoia in your principal character. This is terrific writing.

My only slight 'criticism' is to question whether your story is suitable for readers as young as twelve? Other than that, superb!

THIS is my kind of writing!

I love the way you get straight into the heart of the story, your characters coming to life through their words and actions. It's not over-embellished or described or padded-out with superfluous prose.

In my opinion, your story ends just where it needs to end: without a resolution or any answers. You leave those questions for your reader to figure out. THAT is good story-telling.

Without doubt, your best piece so far. Congratulations.

Oh JOY!

At last, a contribution that actually ticks all the boxes it promises to. Thank you!

I enjoyed your slightly warped and tongue-in-cheek humour in the story and the contemporary references (which our overseas cousins may not connect with...) Above all, though, you made me SMILE, and that doesn't happen very often with most of what I read here...

I'm very much looking forward to many more of your stories. Can I nominate myself as your No. 1 fan already??? :-)

There is a great deal of emotion and passion in your poem. You have expressed them well. Some of the lines are perhaps a little convoluted and 'forced', but the whole is better then some of its parts :-) I hope to read more from you soon!