India • 34 y/o • MaleReviews Received
Mr. Ashwin,
Honestly, this is a good read. The start of this short story was well set as the Lad stood in wait after the fact of his parent's death. The scene is set as his revenge is about to happen. I believe the young lad cries for two reasons, he finally mourns the death of his parents and possibly he realizes the cubs are without a mother, in which he understood.
My present job is a GED instructor in Dallas, Texas and we used this story as an analysis in language arts. Thank you and we will keep reading and use your short stories for our classroom studies.
Francisco
one word, Great!
It always a difficult ask to comment on someone else's religion-themed work. Leaving the theme aside, though, and concentrating on the form of your work is much easier! You have a slightly (if you'll excuse the unintentional pun) 'preachy' way of writing that is slightly off-putting. Whilst I appreciate your good intentions with you poem it left me irritated rather than pleased. I fear that other may also feel the same way, especially non-believers.
An interesting concept which has been executed quite well. I am disappointed, though, that you failed to follow our submission guidelines with regard to numerals (see point three). Overall a creditable effort. I look forward to reading more of your work in the future. :-)