United States • 76 y/oReviews Received
I'm so sorry!
Ben Brown
A great piece of writing. Most humorous. Well done.
If I'd been a conscript, I'm pretty sure I'd have been the guy who got killed by his own grenade.
I loved it! Very well written, think it's interesting that it comes from personal experience as well!
Too disjointed and needs editing. Has some great descriptions such as hourglass figure with lots of sand on top.
The narrative read like a 1940’s-50’s B dective movie with Robert Mitchum .
Great writing. One of the more honest i’ve Read.
I hope you and Martha are together and happy
Ignoring the fact that you ignored several of the site's Submission Guidelines (may I suggest that you actually read them..?) you have a nice flair for telling an engaging story. Your characters are a little shallow in places and some of the dialogue is a tad stilted, but that's okay. The overall impression was positive. Iron out the presentation errors and you'll have a great piece of work :-)