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This was incredible! The way you described the train made me believe I could hear it as clear as Beth could. Brilliant job. I can't wait to read more!

This is gorgeous <3 I am so impressed, you are just as good as I thought you'd be. Maybe even more, actually. You deserve more recognition for this. It's incredible!

Another incredible story. I love the way you explained how love felt to the fire fairy. I certainly am intrigued by this. If you could write another story about this world, I will be sure to check it out! Great job, I really enjoyed this. There was a line of dialogue you forgot to close, though. But other than that, it was amazing!

The tragedy of losing someone dear to you. You tied this to a close very well, good job! It's like a half-story-half-poem and I like that. I do have to say that it's kind of hard to keep up with, though. The repetition of "who are you?" made me want to skip every other line. Maybe consider making the other lines a bit longer or taking out some of those "who are you" 's. Or maybe I'm just really lazy, who's to say? Other than that, it was really good!

i really liked how you kept saying who are you and then at the end you answered the question. it was really sad and almost like a story. kEeP wRiTiNg!! :P

Incredible! You did a brilliant job explaining your point! I believe that the true meaning of life is to make the most out of it, so this goes hand in hand with that. If you believe in yourself and push to overcome the challenges, you'll make the most out of life. It's always been okay to tell people what you need help with, and I'm so glad you included that! Another great piece of writing, Had!

Wow, how intense-
I didn't think it would escalate that quickly!
Maybe separate the paragraphs a bit more. It's harder to read the first few paragraphs because of how mixed up they are. Other than that, you did really well!

This is so sad :( I hope you're doing alright. I'm here to talk if you wanna, just remember that.
The poem was really good, though! I love how you said that the father was a hero. That really put the oomph in it. I love how it's a story-poem, where the poem tells a story. You're very talented!