United States • 23 y/o • FemaleReviews Received
Feelings expressed well
Could have exploited the idea much more
Raw and unfiltered emotion.
I understand the feelings of heart break, not that of a break up but somewhere along those lines. It's hard at first but it does get better. Always know just because one person couldn't see how amazing you are that you're not worthless, they were just down right stupid. Stay strong through these rough times.
Sigh, feelings so rightfully put out but you are young and have so much way to go. I am just going to say this, you can do a lot of things at your age. Love and dating, shouldn't be on your list right now. Go have fun. Do something incredible. It is a waste of time to date when you have your adult years to come. Right now should be about school and having the time of your life.
You won't thank me for saying so, but, really, it is not the end of the world at your age. It only feels like it :-) Every single person who reads your poem will have gone through - or will go through - what you are feeling. It's a painful but necessary part of growing up and learning about life.
I echo what Entangled Fate advised you: enjoy being young; go out and have fun. There is time enough to fall in love and endure all that that brings!
A nice poem with your feeling expressed well.
I really liked this poem, it flowed well and it had a sweet mother like feel to it. I believe it's a very relate able topic, suicide is often thought about daily for some. Good job!