Reviews Received
The story in itself was good. There were parts when commas were missing and some where a period was needed but overall the grammar was good. Word choice was a tad over done, while a large word here and there is good and adds to the story many of them can often times make the sentence a little choppy. Overall a job well done
why don't you make the start more... enticing
Very correct English for a Spanish.
I think you mean in the first line 'yet to be resolved ' or 'unresolved '.overall the story was very good.
I would like to say:
I am a very big fan of your work. It was decently long, decent in general, and the concept of it was highly enjoyable. I also like the idea of putting a quote from Lovecraft at the start, that was quite amusing.
What an exquisitely written story of travel, mystery and peril in Iberia! You may well believe it to be a recently discovered manuscript. The reader will thrill and increase their vocabulary!
Could you give us more information on your narrator's background? This is one way
The style of the building reminded me of my chilhood home, though our house was smaller and in town. It stirred memories of my melancholy childhood.
If you want him to have a happier childhood he could think how different the hall is from where he grew up. Either way we would learn a little more about him and it would help us to care about him.
A detailed short story, and a no-less formidable poem comes along with it. It reminds me of Victorian Age classic ghost stories, yet is very unique (refreshingly, appeciated).