United States • 26 y/oReviews Received
Hiya,
Eery story.
The one thing I noticed that would improve it is to make sure you stay in the same tense throughout. You're switching between past and present tense between paragraphs, and that shouldn't happen.
Good luck on your writing!
Sounds great! You think you could help me with some of my poems and stories! I've been writing for a while but haven't really written poems much.
Great job!
-KP