IanG

I see what yoi're saying and a lot of people will relate to it. A lot of us have had to give up on a dream for one reason or another. Some of us fail using one way, then find another that works. Some people loose one dream but find another that fills the gap. Others are not so lucky.

Perhaps the important thing is to have a plan b. Contrary to what some politicians seem to think there's no shame im having one of those. We can never be sure things will always go our way.

The technical aspects of poetry are not my strong point, but the sentiments are appropriate for our times.

I like the quips and the descriptions of snow and festivities. I wouldn't comment on their talking a man out of suicide as, thankfully, I've no experience of that. I suspect that what works in one case might not in another. Overall its a good story.

You evoke a child's point of view in a more innocent era very well.

If this is based on fact then he should've taken you as you are or not at all. I hope you meet someone who will. There's plenty of time for that to happen.

Passed me reads better than crossed me. Otherwise its a well written story with a touch of mystery. Why did she stay? You set the scene quickly and effectively. Well done there.

These are good descriptions and an interesting premise. I hope you keep writing.

You describe two convincing characters with just a few words. It takes a lot of skill to do that.