IanG

As often before you say a lot with just a few words. Not every writer has thst gift. I certainly don't.

This has a good rythem especially at the start.

As in earlier stories about this gang, you evoke a more innocent time very well.

A lot of young people will relate to this. Its quite usual to break up with someone while in your teens. The trouble is, if its your first break up you've nothing to compare it with and no experience of getting over it. Give yourself time to reflect and recover. It won't seem like it now, but there's time to move on and meet someone else.

This is an atmospheric, imaginative piece. You make good use of other senses besides sight. Keep it up.

I'd have written "there was no escape as the sharks were gaining on him." Please take that as constructive critcism as the basic plot is a good one. Animal lovers will like it.

"Where the wild flowers end seems like an original way of saying this is where the sea begins ot where land ends

The dialogue is amusing but convincing. Well done