IanG

You write better than some men twice yoir age. You blend vivid descriptions and plausible relationships.

An intriguing, passionate start. Time will show how it develops, but the first two instalments should draw people in.

No one I know is perfect we all have human flaws. If there's a God he must know that. No one has all the answers, so its no shame if you havn't.

If this is inspired by a berevement in real life then I feel for you. My mother passed away a few years ago and it was terrible for me. You learn to cope but part of you will miss het for a long time.

The glass metephore is a good one.

You evoke the human characters very well. You also describe the birds and the setting vividly. There are people like Dobson, and people like Arthur. A clash ending in violence is quite possible.

You evoke the characters and the setting with great skill. The clash of values rings true.

Fresh flowers that smell etherial, brought in from the garden" reads better than "fresh flowers brought in from the garden that smell etherial." Otherwise your descriptions are excellent. A simple story but beautifully told.