IanG

If this is written from experience I hope your brothet comes home safe and sound.

My mother died five years ago and it upset me very much. I was lucky because I had good friends to help me. I get the impression you're more isolated than I was. I had bad times before mum died but things improved. Its possible for things to change in your favour even when it serms impossible. Nothing can bring our parents back but we can learn to cope in spite of the pain. I still miss her but the support of my friends helped me through the darkest time. I hope this helps.

You evoke the knight's mental state very well, I felt sorry for him. If you develop this further, you could describe soldiers in industrial age armies reaction to the knight. They would be shocked and bewildered by his appearence.

You say a lot with a few words. Its moving and convincing. I like the phrase 'when the leaves loose grip.'

The sun metephore is good. Sometimes I Iwake up feeling strong emotions from a dream yet can't recall the details of it

I like the metaphore of the first asdignment
It wouldn't have occured to me but now you mention it, its a good one.

This is a moving poem with a lot of good imagery. If its written from experience I hope things get better for yoi soon. Good times don't last forever but niether do bad times.

You describe both the main character and the setting very well. I hope this story gets a lot more hits.