United Kingdom • 60 y/oReviews Given
You evoke the setting very well, especially the swim on the summers day.
The pigeon and what it left is a witty touch. I've heard before that people in dry climates welcome rain so that rings true. In my native Britain rain means gloom, but I can see why things would be different in a desert.
A sweet story and also a timely one about taking others as they are.
There are some good descriptions and a good twist, but twists need to be foreshadowed. Perhaps a police officer could notice Miriam's house was neat and tidy for someone with dementia, but then assume she had a good home help. That drops a hint that Miriam isnt as ill as she seems without giving everything away.
I like the comparison of the ringmaster to a potato. You evoke a different, I think more innocent time very well. The attempted robbey came up ratber suddenly, its as well to foreshadow these tbings. Then again it would be sudden for them. Overall, well done.
This is a nice twist on the theme of don't underestimate the elderly. Chsracters and settings are described very well
This is a vivid descriptive piece. I could imagine I was there.
As often before you say a lot with just a few words. Not every writer has thst gift. I certainly don't.