United States • 19 y/o • MaleReviews Received
Overall pretty good
For the last line, it felt a bit too long so it felt out of theme, maybe you could make it shorter.
this sounds like it would make a great song! keep up the great work!!
Not too shabby, not too shabby.
I've noticed there's a lot of "and" in the writing which really got to me. Some words work well with repetition, but the word "and" just doesn't seem to fit in here.
I do like your note at the end. Respect. Respect. That is how I am sometimes so I understand what you say.
wow so deep :D
Wow, I love this! I really like how you kind of left it open to the reader's interpretation too; like, it's generalized in the way that everyone might have their own person to relate this too.