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JPYoung is from AU Australia • 69 y/o

JPYoung

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IanG
IanG reviewed Everybody Comes to Rico’s

"Tbe few customers until the upcoming dinner time."
Try "there were only a few customers between now and dinner time" it flows a bit better.

You describe the characters very well. I like Joey finding wonder in small tbings.

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IanG
IanG reviewed A Secret Place in Summer

You wrote some good banter and an exciting rescue scene. Well done.

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AaronTheRocker
AaronTheRocker reviewed Penny Valentine from an Unknown Woman

Gotta say I never had that red "romantic magic marker" on any sheet, nor did I want that either.
A fine story indeed.

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AaronTheRocker
AaronTheRocker reviewed Our House is Your House

Oh dang!...
That's a hell of an ending.

Reminds me of the movie Mother! with Jennifer Lawrence and Javier Bardem. But the movie is very much symbolism whereas your story is direct with a little extra 'filler' moments to add spice and wholeness to it.

Not too shabby of a writing.

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IanG
IanG reviewed Snowfire on the Eve of Epiphany

I like the quips and the descriptions of snow and festivities. I wouldn't comment on their talking a man out of suicide as, thankfully, I've no experience of that. I suspect that what works in one case might not in another. Overall its a good story.

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Trimick
Trimick reviewed Descent to the Ninth Circle

Enjoyed it. Mick

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