United Kingdom • 26 y/o • FemaleReviews Given
Good job! Really took the reader through the emotions. Thanks for sharing!
-KP
Amazing!!! Loved it!!! Please continue with other stories!!!!
Wow!! There were a few grammar errors, but I've got to say, it was great! When you were explaining her mother, though, it got a little confusing. I like it a lot and hope that you write more (either to this one or another).
Holy crap my heart just broke. Thanks!! 😜. Great story and I hope you continue!
Oh my gosh!! No kidding! I feel that way sometimes. I never really put myself out there. Hope everything turns out ok, just remember, things happen for a reason.
I hate that saying sometimes - but it's true. Thanks!
-KP
Sounds great! You think you could help me with some of my poems and stories! I've been writing for a while but haven't really written poems much.
Great job!
-KP
I think that though you do need to work on the grammar and punctuation and sentencing, there is a great idea implanted in your writing. I suggest making this the prompt for a new story.
You could start out with the boy not thinking that the story was true, and entering the abandoned bathroom. This way the reader is still creeped out and worried for the main character.
You could also use an age for the boy (both of them), and tell why the boy in the mirror is first off in the mirror and second whh he skipped his classes.
Great work, can't wait to hear more!
Very powerful and sends an emotional experience to all the readers. You accidentally said site instead of sight near the end, but besides that it sounds great!