United States • 26 y/oReviews Received
I rate this a 4 because it didn't make sense to mAke the adopted boy the killer. BTW this could've been a Mystery book to
This story interested me. The only questions I have are:
1) Shouldn't he have washed the blood off?
2) Did he feel ne remorse at all? He just killed his whole family.
3) Why didn't he just run away?
4) Shouldn't his sister like it because he went through a lot of trouble to get it?
Other than that it was a really nice story. It just needs a little editing are revising. It's a little confusing too.
This story was really good. There were a few spelling errors, but other than that just wow good job!
I just love dark stories like this, I really do but this story needs a little bit of work which is fine. It has the potential of being better and with more work it can be. So please do write more stories. I am looking forward to it.
An interesting idea that needs considerably more work to make it into a great story. The whole idea was too big to condense into so few words, which gives your story a somewhat rushed and unfinished feel. However, a good effort nonetheless.
I very much look forward to reading more from you in due course.
A sad story but frightening because it is plausible.