Kaprie Keeling

hey, this was pretty good. i liked the ending and i like the characters, though they could have a bit more character depth.

Wow, that took a turn. I love it. I can't help but wonder what happens to them next. I do feel like the writing could use a little more showing than telling, but the characters feel individual, and I like all three of them, and while it hints at a larger story, leaving it here still satisfies me.
My thoughts are all over the place right now...

Hm.... Comparison to other writers is rarely healthy. There is good comparison, but you've got to watch your step. Learning is a long process, but rewarding, almost never a waste. We all just have to improve as much as we individually can, and while we might still feel trapped by ourselves or things around us, it's largely up to us to change that.

This, this is amazing. I love the rhythm and the words are perfect. I love it.

This is an interesting idea. I like it.

I liked it, it was cute and the rhyme was good