lavorish

It'd be nice if you could make separate paragraphs for each time frame like one for 7am and what he did and so on. I don't know if there's a second part or not but there's no antagonist so the story isn't really building up to anything and if there's no antagonist then you can't build up suspense either in the beginning to hook readers to read. I don't wanna leave a bad stain on this so I'll give you a four out of five since it's pretty long and has potential.