I sincerety hope things get better for you soom Scorp. The word weept should be wept but that's a minor issue. I think you're showing courage and resiliance but I wish yoi didn't have to.
This is really beautiful. I can't really tell if you were meaning to write about yourself, or about someone else, or both, but I think that either way this is a very powerful work. It really painted a picture for me, and I think others would agree.