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What a brilliant start! But then I got very confused in the fourth section... I think with a little work here, it has the potential to be a great piece of work.
I look forward to reading more.....

please have courage Kkliz
Keep writing, it can be very therapeutic

So so sad..... You are very talented SamZ.
I liked the build up of the story, all except for the last line; I think the ending needs some more work to make it 'complete' I'm sure it will be worth it!

I quite liked this - up to the final paragraph about the new family, which I think spoiled the story. I think it would be much better with a different ending... or even (in my opinion) just to use the last sentence after Robin's death & end the story there

very poignant, well done !