United States • 29 y/oReviews Received
I think that though you do need to work on the grammar and punctuation and sentencing, there is a great idea implanted in your writing. I suggest making this the prompt for a new story.
You could start out with the boy not thinking that the story was true, and entering the abandoned bathroom. This way the reader is still creeped out and worried for the main character.
You could also use an age for the boy (both of them), and tell why the boy in the mirror is first off in the mirror and second whh he skipped his classes.
Great work, can't wait to hear more!
Good job
I like where the story is going, But it's not there yet. keep working on it :)
mirrors are a worth of reflection of memory
I liked to write a review
as the bathroom scene was fun
like in the mirror is real
would see no other but you
OMG I NEED MORE PLEASE
That was amazing.. Please continue this.
wow i love this
Good grammar makes a good story. Bad grammar makes a bad story and this is bad grammar. Not saying it has to be perfect, but some things just bother readers especially when it comes to punctuation, proper nouns, spelling, all that good stuff.
I like the idea, but I believe it was poorly executed.