United States • 25 y/o • FemaleReviews Received
Wow i think this is amazing, im actually using it as a piece for UIL so good job!! <3
Great job! Touching and tear-bringing. I know it wasn't one of your strongest works, but it was one of the good ones that I have read on this website. (Sometimes people write about cat fur and it drives me nuts!!!)
You're doing great! -KP
It sounds great, a few punctual and grammatical errors, but so far it sounds pretty good.
I understand what it is to first wade into the water. I slowly went in, but at chest deep I realized that the shore was becoming harder to see.
I find that it is easier to go in than out. You can come in, in less than three minutes. You come out from three months to three years - and to some even more.
It is hard to be in these hardships, you feel that you can't reach out for help because you are embarrassed about what you have done - or feel that they wouldn't understand.
Hang in here! -KP
This is really touching. I read this just a short minute ago and I really loved it. I am also in a similar position. I honestly think there is no hope for my future. Your poem really have got me thinking about what depression truly is.
I feel your writing talent is being misdirected. Clearly you have a headful of stories that you would like to tell. With some guidance and advice you could become a good writer. In order to do so, though, you need to take more care with your writing and to pay more attention to detail. Much of what you write is good, but it is spoiled by a rather slap-dash approach. I would like to see your stories being praised for their content AND presentation - and I'll be the lead cheerleader when they are :-)