Mitzi Danielson-Kaslik

I have been here, and in my experience, the only way for it to not be displayed on your profile is if you go to edit it and make it private. I have several repeats....

it was good but (this is going to sound weird but) with future works, maybe try to make the rhyming lines go ABABCDCD... or something like that instead of AABBCCDD because it does give a different feel so idk just try it out, otherwise, l like the words

As before, you evoke the setting beautifully. I like the metaphore of the worne globe

I like your descriptions, they are so vivid I can imagine that I'm there. When it comes to the plot,I'm coming in part way through but it reads promising from here.

This is an atmospheric, imaginative piece. You make good use of other senses besides sight. Keep it up.

Very good.