Mitzi Danielson-Kaslik

same here

it was good but (this is going to sound weird but) with future works, maybe try to make the rhyming lines go ABABCDCD... or something like that instead of AABBCCDD because it does give a different feel so idk just try it out, otherwise, l like the words

This painted such a great picture of the room, and the emotions..wonderful to read!

This story gave me the same "lost in time" reading feeling as I get while reading my favorite novels: it's truly addictive! Were this part of the back of a novel, I would 100% buy it. Keep writing, lovely!

Sad, but true to life.

this was beautifully written. you're amazing at describing the scene and your word choice is so good!