India • 29 y/oReviews Given
i enjoyed reading this story.Once started had to end it.loved it :)
covers the true meaning of love.....but maybe you can make the dialogues shorter add some actions by the character that reflect what their feelings try those out and your story will get into a good shape
the title the end all just falls in place.Maybe you can add a bit more description...maybe he can go through what happened during the day and the suspense can be that hes the one who is going to die.Just a random though that i got after reading the story .....:) but overall it was good
nice simple and short.....maybe you can make it one page and make it more impressionable ..
gave a good warmth feel when i read it