United States • 66 y/oReviews Given
I don't know what your trying to accomplish with this piece of writing, but it's definitely not a structured shorty story. This reads like a confession for sure, but not a shorty story. There is no specific incident, rising action, or climax. This is like a crime report that is written well, but that's about it.
Sorry, but this is not a short story. This is more like what you would expect someone to stand up and recite at a twelve-step program meeting.
A fun, light, humorous story. I liked the unexpected part when the sister revealed she had given the drunken note to the neighbor. In my opinion, the story should also be labeled as a romance as it leans that way, but not too far, thankfully. There are a couple of typos you may want to fix. Good writing.
Good story. Great dialogue, and the climax of the story is a surprise to the reader. Good job
Good story. Had a great twist in it that catches the reader by surprise. Good structure. Whether by intent or not, I was left wondering if Lucy had come into the city for random entertainment, or if she had the same intent as Max. I certainly detected a bit of irony in the story, also. Good job.
Well written. Points out the fundamental reality of nature, which is all things must have an opposite, including world peace. Watch how a dog will rush the fence barking, and growling when another dog walks past, and maybe sometimes they wag tales, and sniff each other through the fence. people do the same thing whether on the level of one on one or whole countries. Enjoyable, easy read with a message attached to it.
A fun read, and the revealing truth of the doctor's attitude is true to form. I always feel like just another animal in the herd when I go to the doctor. I like the way the wife derailed his cattle call method of consulting. Good story.
A well written, entertaining story, easy to read. I didn't quite understand the ending regarding 1945. Some obscure meaning I didn't understand, but not a story killer. Good job.