United States • 31 y/o • FemaleReviews Received
Hi. Nice to read something new from you :-)
Having read some of your more recent works I can see the improvement in your writing style. Your inexperience when you wrote this shows through with the repetition of words and phrases, especially at the beginning. On the whole, though, it's another of your engaging and action-filled adventure/fantasy stories that keeps one reading right to the end. Good stuff!
Fabulous! (later edit 11/05/16)) Having re-read this I 'saw' more than the first time. Although not my 'cup of tea' I appreciate your skill in writing in this genre. You have a fabulous imagination, which comes across vividly in your story.
I loved the concept behind this clever story, Rebs. I think the execution is a little 'clunky' in places as the flow of the story 'hiccups'. In saying that, though, I was hooked into the story right to the end, so that's to your credit.
A judicious edit and a little polishing would make this good story into a fabulous one :-)
This story is engaging and interesting so far. It's a little difficult to understand who is doing what to whom in the first half. But I am interested in reading the rest to see where this goes.
Dark, pointed and utterly superb. I wonder if you had in mind the same person I once wrote a poem about..? If so, it would appear she has not changed one iota :-)
Great work, Rebs. You should write more poetry. You are good at it :-)
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Spoken like the rebellious soul you truly are. Most play at it or aspire to it: You, m'dear, live the life and I applaud you for it. Love the poem as it is you to a tee :-)
You know I always love your work. This is is just great.