Nathan M Green

Simply amazing! Brilliant. A poor child's innocence... Abusive Father... Helpless mother... Every single thing is so subtly conveyed with so little text. Children have the amazing ability to speak cute and short.

Ohh, excellent!
I loved this. The beginning in particular reminded me of The Catcher in the Rye. The way you developed the character throughout the story was magnificent, and also, I think this is a real thing which people can easily connect with!
Extremely good work... However, I would like to point out two areas for you to improve:
- Imagery.
- The character acted a little too sentimental considering his previous thoughts.

Wow!! It sounds great! I knew it was a father or stepfather at about the third paragraph, but that's just because I have read things like this. There are a few grammar errors, but besides that it's great!

Amazing!! I tend to avoid reading things about different religions (it just makes me uncomfortable), but that was great and changed my whole prospective! Good luck for the future!

Wow. I almost fell over. That was great!! Please do write more like this!!

Wow! Great!
One thing, the ending was a little confusing. Was the narrator playing the guitar or the version of himself playing the guitar?
It encaptured me like light (it would make sense if you knew me)! I hope I get to hear more!

That was amazing! I held off on reading it for a while because I thought it was the original poem, but that was hallarious! Please do write more!!

Wow. Jaw-dropping and convincing story that will definitly keep you up all night.