superman21

Amazing, showed passion and clearly created the emotions of the poem. It cut deeply into me and I hope that if you're going through that - that everything works out alright. (Animals help a lot)
-KP

Wow! Really discriptive! Makes me want to write something like that. I think I will stick to short romance stories though 😜. Seems to be what I'm good at.
Keep writing! -KP

Now that's what you I'm talking about! I felt that you had true meaning and feeling behind this, some past experience that made you feel deep down that you didn't wish this upon anyone.
The rhyming was more decent, but the meaning is more.
Keep writing! -KP

There is a great deal of emotion and passion in your poem. You have expressed them well. Some of the lines are perhaps a little convoluted and 'forced', but the whole is better then some of its parts :-) I hope to read more from you soon!

Wow!! Touching and wondering!! I have so many unanswered questions, though.
Why did the wife and children disappear? Were they dead before or were they just trying to coax him out of bed from the window? Is that why he got up? Because he wanted to see his wife and kids?
Great job! -KP

This has a true meaning, but sounds a little hasty or rushed, and make me question if you should've made this a poem of not. Though the message is clear and knowing, which I love to see.
-KP

Days like this will come and go, leaving impressions and wounds. You just have to learn how to bandage them and let them become unhurtful scars. Hang in there!
-KP