United States • 22 y/o • MaleReviews Received
I got a bit confused at the end, but overall I liked it
It seems like she's more worried about fashion and herself than the boy, who is yet to be named. She seems to be moving too fast into acceptance then she would be in real life. I would think she's still in shock and less worried about her wardrobe. It's a good book though and I hope you continue. Seems like somethings missing though, something crucial, but I can't put my finger on it.
I think I agree with melissak (again :3). I don't really know what it is though. Something to consider about the dresses is that they might have tried to give her less fancy dresses to help her ease into her new life. Less frills, less poofyness, less lace, but still soft and silky. Also, about how old is Lu?
Sir Ayren seems like one of those people I read in mangas who are crooks. I'm not sure if he just seems that way or if he's actually a crook. I'm very interested in the boy with green eyes. I can already imagine the boy without a description. Also, did you mean: "a white woman with sleeves" instead of "a with woman with sleeves"
I think you did a pretty good job keeping the action going. I liked the urgency the battery percentage gave throughout the story. I, personally, found the setting almost as intriguing as the scenario. It would be interesting to read more.
Yeah nothing last forever, yet we promise forever without a care in the world. It's quite funny how things seem to turn out.
