United States • 22 y/o • MaleReviews Received
Well, I think I get what you're saying here, at least in my own way. Good prose, by the way.
I've had this problem before. Honestly I don't have any idea what the best course of action is when wanting to say something but being afraid of what will happen if you do, but this certainly captures the uncertainty of the situation.
I really like the way this story begins. The first paragraph about tragedies has good rhetoric and I find it very interesting.
You describe Zaire's feelings and the setting very well. This raises a lot of questions about the characters and their culture, but if you're planning on developing it furthet that's good. Keep writing.
To me, this read like a fever dream. I'm not sure I understood what was happening. It was interesting, though.
You write better than some men twice yoir age. You blend vivid descriptions and plausible relationships.
You describe the setting well, despite the brevity of it. It left me wanting to know mote then agaim perhaps its good to make us use our imaginstions.
This is a good question, but other things also need to be considered. Many people do believe in a god, multiple gods, no god. How do you know which ones which, how do you know which one to believe in, what is the truth? Those are questions to also consider besides morality. Many people make up their own morals, and so that means that you can have all of those things without believing in a God(s) or no god(s). There are many different religions, beliefs, cultures. Is there a way to tell which one's the right one? Everyone has their own beliefs and morals, but that doesn't mean that everything's going to fit perfectly because many people believe in many different things.