United States • 22 y/o • MaleReviews Received
Wow, this is really good! I hope to see more of your work!
Great!
1. Great job, there are a few errors here and there but nothing major. Does make you wish it were that easy to fix though.
2. You based this mostly off a comic? I know you said it but still this is mostly off a comic?
1) That was written well, nothing grammatically wrong as far as i can tell.
2) I can completely relate to this story
Good story keep writing!
3) I sort of noticed this while reading but, add a c to Iares to get Icares which describes that friend and switch the k in miko to an n for mino which describes that friend.
Just something i noticed.
This is just too true!
I'm kind of confused about when and who and such, but this is good. I like the dark feeling it has.