United States • 22 y/o • MaleReviews Given
Made me chuckle inside
I will say, we spent a strange amount of time talking about mushrooms, and it feels very different from the rest of the story. At the end, it says "Before they knew it, they were inseparable friends", but we didn't see that process (which is fine, because the story is going to be relatively short, and you can't show everything) but we DID see mushrooms, which left me confused.
Maybe I missed something that gives the mushrooms meaning. Maybe I'm too hung up on them. Either way, I like the tone of this, and the pictures you chose have the cold, airy, but still stable vibe of the story.
To be clear, I actually like the mushroom conversation (except for the obnoxious technical names) but I do question its necessity in this story. Ya gots ta be intentional about what you show, and if we're hung up on plants while brushing by character development, it can leave the reader feeling cheated.
Jolene is a party in the worst way possible. 0/10
Very captivating idea. I liked realizing what was happening, and since this is a story about merpeople, it's inherently interesting.
That was a surprisingly heart-warming twist! Nice job!
This is so good! Upload more please.
Michael and Avery already have a dynamic I know I'll love. Oh, and the writing feels professional enough to make me feel like I'm reading a published e-book.